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【兩篇範文】

在此筆者以96學年度的學測題目作為範例，提供兩篇學生的範文以及一篇由老師執筆的範例，讓讀者可以清楚的比較兩者的差異。連環圖片的題型也是歷年來最常考出來的題型之一。

二、英文作文(20%)

提示︰請以下面編號1至4的四張圖畫內容為藍本，依序寫一篇文章，描述女孩與貓之間的故事。你也可以發揮想像力，自己選定一個順序，編寫故事。請注意，故事內容務必涵蓋四張圖意，力求情節完整、前後發展合理。

Student 1

Kitty is a cat lover, and she looks for cute kittens in her community from time to time. One day Kitty came across a park and saw an adorable kitten. She went to the cat right away. She took out the toy ball that she always carries with her and started to play with it. Before long, Kitty and the little kitten built up a bound. After that she decided to took (take) it home. While they are on their way home, more and more cats went behind them. As a cat lover, Kitty must have something that attracts these adorable creatures. Somehow she didn't notice there are more cats behind. At the time (When) she arrive (arrived) home, she told her mom that she wanted to pet the kitten (keep the kittens at home). “All these cats? Are you sure?” mom (her mom) said that with somewhat astonish (astonishment) and confusion. However Kitty couldn't resist the watering eyes from (of) the kittens. “Well, okay” mom (her mom)  replied with helpless (helplessness), “Just don't make a mess!” After few days, mom left home because these cats made a terrible mess. Kitty found that she should vanish her unruly personality (refrain from rescuing street animals), even though she can't resist adorable kittens.

Student 2

Be responsible

Jane is a cat lover. In her free time, she likes to play with stray cats in the park near her house. She usually plays a ball with the cats, accompanies them to walk in the park, or feeds them some food. All the cats regard Jane as their true keeper. One day, Jane took a cat that she most likes (like the most) back home, and negotiated with her mom that (X) whether she could keep the cat at home.  She wanted the cat to live with her every second. And then her mother told her a lot of things that she might face in the future after keeping a pet. Despite(Even though) Jane knew what difficult situation she might confront, she still decided to keep it.

The next day, Jane went to the park with the cat she wanted to keep in her arms. Then, it turned out that the other cats followed Jane all along from the park to her home, and Jane never noticed! With all the cats standing in front of her house, Jane had no excuse to drive them out. Moreover, Jane was too kind to cast all the cats out. So, she decided to keep all the cats in her room. However, the problems appeared after two days. The cats made a mess in her room and made the house dirtier and dirtier. Although the cats are cute, their habits aren’t. Jane didn’t like the messy and dirty environment, but she couldn’t complain. Because she knew that she should take the responsible (responsibility) for her own choice. After that day, Jane cleans after the mess the cats make. Even though it is troublesome, she embraces the hassle, because it is for her passion—cats!

Teacher's

Being a cat lover, Adelyn couldn’t spend one day without playing with cats. When she saw a kitty one day when she was strolling in the park, she was dying to bring it home and keep it as a pet. It was a feral cat, but it was friendly to Adelyn. Everything tells Adelyn that they are meant to be together. Little did she know that feral cats live in a group. They go everywhere together. When Adelyn brought away one kitten, she was actually bringing away the whole clowder.

“Well, since I love cats,” Adelyn told herself, “that should not be a problem. The more the merrier.” Adelyn even managed to persuade her mother, who was very concerned about bringing home a bunch of cats. She conceded eventually, because she wanted to be a supportive mom. Things didn’t turn out quite as they imagined. The cats weren’t as nice and tame as they thought. As a matter of fact, they were far from tamed! They scratched the sofa and they made a mess everywhere in the house.

“Next time I want to support you,” says Adelyn’s mom, “remind me that I have to take calculated risks.”

文章架構、實用詞彙片語慣用語句型解說

1. 使用分詞構句與分詞片語：

Ex: Kitty is a cat lover, and she looks for cute kittens in her community from time to time.

→ Being a cat loving, Kitty often looks for…

2. 練習不用no或者not造否定句

Ex: Somehow she didn't notice there are more cats behind.

→ Little did she know…

Ex: She couldn’t throw all the cats away because they were too cute.

→ The cats were just too cute to be cast away.

Ex: Somehow she didn't notice there are more cats behind.

→ She failed to notice that…

3. 使用It當做虛主詞或虛受詞

Ex: I think it is hard to…

→I find it hard to…

Ex: He thinks everybody should forgive him…

→ He takes it for granted that…

4. 適當的倒裝句：

(1) So + 形容詞 + be + 主詞 + that + 句子（如此...以致於...）

Ex: So precious is time that we can't afford to waste it.

(2) Adj + as + Subject（主詞）+ be, S + V~~~（雖然...）

Ex: Rich as our country is, the qualities of our living are by no means satisfactory.

{by no means = in no way = on no account 一點也不}

(3) On no account can we + V ~~~（我們絕對不能...）

Ex: On no account can we ignore the value of knowledge.

5. 使用其他句型

(1) Nothing is + ~~~ er than to + V / N

Nothing is + more + 形容詞 + than to + V

Ex: Nothing is more difficult than to persuade her mom.

(2) The + ~er + S + V, ~~~ the + ~er + S + V ~~~

The + more + Adj + S + V, ~~~ the + more + Adj + S + V ~~~（愈...愈...）

Ex. The harder you work, the more progress you make.

6. 善用片語及慣用語

(1) Spare no effort to + V; do one's utmost to + V = do one's best（不遺餘力的）

Ex. We should spare no effort/do our utmost to beautify our environment.

(2) bring home to + 人 + 事 （讓...明白...事）

Ex. We should bring home to people the value of working hard.

(3) be closely related to ~~（與...息息相關）

Ex. Taking exercise is closely related to health.

環顧四周，仔細觀察，不然發現寫作能力優異的人多半擁有這個特徵：他們能夠從文章當中找出自己喜歡的佳句，並記在自己的筆記本裡。寫作能力較弱的學生往往沒有這個習慣，或者甚至找不出文章裡的優美句子。寫作是從模仿而來的，然而寫作也是訓練獨立思考最佳的工具，也因此有人說，如果你要訓練獨立思考，那麼光是閱讀絕對不夠的！你必須要進行寫作。

最後一個故事作為總結。文學巨擘莫泊桑年輕的時候曾經求教「包法利夫人」作者福樓拜如何成為一個優秀的作家，福樓拜便問了莫泊桑：

「你剛剛是怎麼上來進到這個屋子裡面的？」

「我是走階梯上來的。」莫泊桑回答

「你記得走了幾階嗎？」福樓拜問道

「我…」莫泊桑回答「我不記得了」

「那麼你可以再去看一遍」

莫泊桑回來之後，告訴他的前輩台階總共有幾節，他有問：

「你知道台階是什麼材質嗎？」

「我…」莫泊桑又結巴了起來「我並沒有注意」

「那麼你可以再去看一遍」

莫泊桑回來之後，再次說清楚台階的材質。福樓拜又問：

「那麼走上台階的時候有聽到什麼聲音嗎？」

於是莫泊桑又再去走了一遍台階，以便聽清楚走台階的時候感受到的聲音。

「那麼走上台階的時候，有聞到什麼氣味嗎？」

於是莫泊桑又得再去走一遍，來發現走台階的時候可以聞到的氣味。

最後莫泊桑終於明白了，寫作不只要求書寫的人要打開眼睛，也必須要打開他的五官，細心的感受，仔細的品嚐。當別人只能用視覺來描述一段經歷，你卻能用視覺、聽覺、嗅覺、觸覺、甚至心靈的感覺來描述，這才是練習寫作可以帶給我們最大的幫助。

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